Monday, February 13, 2017

Son of a Pitch Round One



ROUND ONE!


 A chance to refine your query and first 250 words. Post your query and 250 words on your blog then leave a direct link in the comments below. Please leave feedback on the author's blog, and for a minimum of three other queries and first 250. 

 All feedback left in the comments below will be deleted.

Also, for more detail on the editors involved, join the Facebook event.

***You don't have to participate in this round to join Round 2. It is highly recommended to get that extra polish before the voting round.***

GOOD LUCK!



Want to see my query that won me my first book deal? Well, here it is!


To save her younger sisters from being taken to the cruel life of the palace, Naomi intervenes and gives herself to be a wife of the erratic Pharaoh. She is the oldest daughter of the direct line of Israel, and as her father's favorite child, she is well-educated and knows she is the closest thing her people have to a princess.

In the palace, Naomi finds herself thrust into the intrigues of the royal family. She is savvy and bright, so the Great Queen Nefertiti perceives Naomi to be her greatest threat. But Naomi refuses to submit to Nefertiti’s physical and emotional abuse. Naomi becomes beloved by the Pharaoh, who declares that she will bear him his heir. Nefertiti, furious with jealousy, schemes to destroy Naomi and even brings her fidelity into question, which could cost Naomi her very life.

Naomi must play the deadly game carefully. She is in a silent battle of wills, and a struggle for who will one day inherit the crown. And when she does bear an heir, she must fight to protect him as well as herself from Nefertiti who is out for blood.

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  1. lea_ysayeFebruary 13, 2017 at 12:22 AM

    Thank you so much for organising! This is my first pitch party, and here's my submission for comment: https://melgoughwriter.wordpress.com/2017/02/12/my-first-twitter-pitch-party-sonofapitch/

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  2. r. r. campbellFebruary 13, 2017 at 5:13 AM

    Thanks for organizing! Excited to get and give feedback :)

    http://www.rrcampbellwrites.com/2017/02/its-time-for-sonofapitch.html

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  3. AllBrevityWitFebruary 13, 2017 at 5:39 AM

    Thanks for the opportunity!

    http://littlewingblue.wixsite.com/ajsuper/single-post/2017/02/13/Son-of-a-Pitch-BENEATH-GREEN

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  4. Lauren KilleyFebruary 13, 2017 at 6:08 AM

    Thank you so much! Looking forward to reading all the posts!

    https://laurenkilley.wordpress.com/2017/02/14/son-of-a-pitch/

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  5. UnknownFebruary 13, 2017 at 6:35 AM

    This should be very interesting! Thanks for running the show :)
    https://phoebedarqueling.com/2017/02/13/son-of-a-pitch-entry/

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  6. AnonymousFebruary 13, 2017 at 7:07 AM

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  7. Kelley M LikesFebruary 13, 2017 at 7:11 AM

    Thanks so much! Enjoy!

    https://sites.google.com/site/booksbykelleymlikes/blog

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  8. UnknownFebruary 13, 2017 at 7:33 AM

    Woohoo! :D So excited for this event!

    Here is my post: https://simplyhannahthings.wordpress.com/2017/02/13/sonofapitch/

    I'm going to start driving into everyone's queries now!

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  9. UnknownFebruary 13, 2017 at 8:05 AM

    Thank you so much for hosting!
    Let's throw my submission to in :)
    http://www.thebooklander.com/

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  10. UnknownFebruary 13, 2017 at 8:09 AM

    I haven't been this excited since the Ewoks headed up my Girl Scout Troop.

    Can't wait to start reading. Thanks for the opportunity!

    https://hannahbobell.wordpress.com/2017/02/12/son-of-a-pitch-the-ya-strikes-back/

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  11. A.J. ScottFebruary 13, 2017 at 8:15 AM

    This is great!Thanks so much for organizing this! I am so excited!

    https://bubbleloaf.wordpress.com/2017/02/13/sonofapitch-round-one/

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  12. MarkJensenFebruary 13, 2017 at 8:35 AM

    This is terrific. I've been steadily working on my query these past few weeks, so feedback on it would be great!

    http://www.markjensenwriter.com/el-blog/

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    1. MarkJensenFebruary 13, 2017 at 12:26 PM

      Apologies, but the link above doesn't work quite right. Please use this link instead:

      http://www.markjensenwriter.com/2017/02/lunar-base-lost-query/

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  13. Retro Wall StreetFebruary 13, 2017 at 8:45 AM

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    1. Retro Wall StreetFebruary 13, 2017 at 11:03 AM

      Looking forward to digging into queries and first 250's this week.
      Apologize for the issues with the blog link earlier, but I've corrected it.
      http://darknovelist.com/

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  14. Elisa StrykerFebruary 13, 2017 at 9:04 AM

    Thank you for the opportunity!

    http://elisastryker1.blogspot.com/2017/02/son-of-pitch-query-immunity-ya-fantasy.html

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  15. Amy DrayerFebruary 13, 2017 at 9:29 AM

    Looking forward to participating. Thanks for your time putting this together and for the opportunity!

    http://www.adrayer.com/blog-it-out/son-of-a-pitch

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  16. JulieFebruary 13, 2017 at 1:03 PM

    Can't wait to start reading everyone's queries and first 250. Here is the link to mine. Good luck to all! http://julielivingthedream.blogspot.com/

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  17. UnknownFebruary 13, 2017 at 1:04 PM

    Thank you so much for such a great opportunity! Here's the link to my entry:

    http://jennyarosen.blogspot.de/

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  18. AnonymousFebruary 13, 2017 at 3:02 PM

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  19. UnknownFebruary 13, 2017 at 3:02 PM

    Thank you so much for putting this together!

    Here's my entry. (Literary Historical Fiction)

    https://cesarmontufar3.wordpress.com/2017/02/13/son-of-a-pitch/

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  20. UnknownFebruary 13, 2017 at 3:29 PM

    Thank you for any advice you can offer. https://lauravaleri.com/2017/02/13/son-of-a-pitch-query-contest/

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  21. AnonymousFebruary 13, 2017 at 4:18 PM

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  22. Danielle MaurerFebruary 13, 2017 at 4:20 PM

    I'm that special breed of nervous/excited right now - this is my first time participating! Looking forward to reading everybody else's queries!

    http://daniellemaurer.com/blog/2017/2/13/sonofapitch-round-one-entry

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  23. AnonymousFebruary 13, 2017 at 4:38 PM

    Thx. Here is the link to mine (adult thriller) -

    https://jayperinwordpress.wordpress.com/2017/02/13/first-blog-post/

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  24. UnknownFebruary 13, 2017 at 5:47 PM

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  25. UnknownFebruary 13, 2017 at 6:52 PM

    Thank you for doing this! I'm excited to take part.

    https://roseofgerdes.wordpress.com/2017/02/13/sonofapitch

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  26. Alethea KatherineFebruary 13, 2017 at 6:54 PM

    Thank you all so much for doing this! Looking forward to hearing everybody's thoughts! I have two novels that I'm currently querying; here are the links to my blog posts. Looking forward to exchanging with everybody! :-)

    https://aletheakatherine.wordpress.com/2017/02/14/query-letter-ashes-ashes/

    https://aletheakatherine.wordpress.com/2017/02/14/query-letter-da-capo-al-fine/

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  27. UnknownFebruary 13, 2017 at 10:21 PM

    Thanks everyone! I'm ready for some feedback:)

    http://renaesmithworks.blogspot.com/2017/02/son-of-pitchin.html

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  28. N. M. SimmonsFebruary 13, 2017 at 10:31 PM

    Whew-- made it! Thank you for organizing and hosting this event! Looking forward to reading some queries tomorrow :) Here is mine:
    https://enlightenedwolfblog.wordpress.com/2017/02/14/pitch-wars/

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  29. elizabeth HarteyFebruary 14, 2017 at 12:03 AM

    Thanks for the great opportunity1 This is my blog
    https://www.elizabethhartey.com/blog/

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  30. AnonymousFebruary 14, 2017 at 5:05 AM

    We'll try this for a fifth time...
    Thank you in advance. Here's the link to my blog:

    https://wordpress.com/read/feeds/9606771/posts/1337782806

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  31. AnonymousFebruary 14, 2017 at 5:13 AM

    Katie: can you just delete my previous comment – I don't know how it changed the link, but you can get to my blog by clicking on my name, or I'll try to add a new comment... Hopefully this won't be confusing...

    https://blindinoneeyeblog.wordpress.com/2017/02/13/query-and-first-250-words/

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  32. AnonymousFebruary 14, 2017 at 5:34 AM

    Updated version - thanks to all who crit.

    https://jayperinwordpress.wordpress.com/2017/02/14/updated-version-son-of-a-pitch/

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  33. Lauren Hanley-BradyFebruary 14, 2017 at 8:57 AM

    Trying to get this to post, hopefully this one will do it! Thanks to anyone who stops by!

    http://www.hanleybrady.com/son-pitch-contest/

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  34. Michael LunsfordFebruary 14, 2017 at 9:20 AM

    Thanks so much for hosting! Here's my submission:
    http://www.lunsfordmichael.com/?m=201702

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  35. Ellen MulhollandFebruary 14, 2017 at 7:14 PM

    Excited for your help, everyone!

    http://www.ellenmulholland.com/son-of-a-pitch

    Thanks, Katie :)

    -Ellen

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  36. UnknownFebruary 14, 2017 at 11:23 PM

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  37. ...February 15, 2017 at 9:52 AM

    Hi everyone. I'm a "first time caller" to the Son of a Pitch, so I hope I did this right. I'm so grateful for all of your notes. Thank you! - Kris

    http://www.kriskosach.com/blog/son-of-a-pitch

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    1. ...February 15, 2017 at 5:37 PM

      PS I plan on reciprocating to all who give me feedback. Also- I think instead of making edits as I go, I'll leave it as-is to see who concurs with the notes. MUCH THANKS!

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  38. KJ MiltonFebruary 15, 2017 at 10:11 AM

    Better late than never, I hope????

    https://authorkjmilton.wordpress.com/2017/02/14/faces-in-250-words-or-less/

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    1. KJ MiltonFebruary 16, 2017 at 7:57 PM

      Revised after feedback. Thanks so much, y'all...it's helped a lot! I think so, anyway :D

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  39. AnonymousFebruary 15, 2017 at 11:01 AM

    Hi all. Seems like a great exercise here. I will try to return comments.

    https://patwritesnow.wordpress.com/2017/02/15/son-of-a-pitch/

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  40. AnonymousFebruary 15, 2017 at 1:29 PM

    https://levelupfangirl.com/2017/02/15/son-of-a-pitch-contest-entry/

    Mine is up! Thanks for this wonderful opportunity :)

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  41. UnknownFebruary 15, 2017 at 2:40 PM

    Made a wordpress just for this opportunity. Can't wait to read everyone's pitches.
    Thanks!

    https://cameroneldridge.wordpress.com/2017/02/15/son-of-a-pitch-query-250/

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  42. UnknownFebruary 15, 2017 at 9:42 PM

    Hi,

    Hope this works this time... ugh.

    https://patwritesnow.wordpress.com/2017/02/15/son-of-a-pitch/

    I'll try to comment back on any I receive.

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  43. UnknownFebruary 16, 2017 at 8:20 AM

    Here is version 3. Thanks for all the feedback!

    http://kdwstories.blogspot.com/2017/02/son-of-pitch-2017-its-own-kind-of_15.html

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  44. UnknownFebruary 16, 2017 at 10:08 AM

    My name is Mitch and this is my entry: socialexperimentparticipant.wordpress.com/2017/02/16/sonofapitch/

    Thanks for the feedback!

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  45. UnknownFebruary 16, 2017 at 8:05 PM

    Someone tell me which pitch to pick... and I will...

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    1. AnonymousFebruary 17, 2017 at 7:01 PM

      mine. :) https://diendrial.wordpress.com/2017/02/18/dylan-query/

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  46. Dianne GardnerFebruary 17, 2017 at 6:51 PM

    Dylan https://diendrial.wordpress.com/

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  47. Elisa StrykerFebruary 18, 2017 at 3:47 PM

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