Tuesday, April 17, 2012

Short Story for Darci Cole!


We rushed through the bushes, crunching, crashing, but we had to be careful, if we were caught we would be sent home and banned from returning to camp. In the darkness the air was buzzing with cicadas and smelled of the humidity rising from the ground. The moisture had been left there by the early seasonal storm and its scent was impregnated by the familiar scent of eucalyptus. It was the perfect summers night, and it was about to get better.
We burst through the treeline to the sandy river bank and turned westward toward the jetty. Joseph began pulling of his shirt as we approached and tossed it aside as he stepped onto the wood. He kicked his flip flops off then pulled off his jeans which brought whoops and hollers from all our friends. He turned and jeered at us before doing a back flip off the end of the jetty into the water. We couldn't help laughing at his cockiness. As he resurfaced he gestured for the boys to give him the cello. They tossed it in beside him before one leaned over to pass him the bow. He glanced around for me and I was pushed forward to the end of the jetty so he could see me. “This is for you Ash.” He grinned as he gently pressed the bow against the cello's strings. He began playing Bach's suite six for cello. We could see it was difficult for him, he had to hold the weight of the cello with one hand so it wouldn't sink, while also trying to press on the right strings. But he was the best cellist at camp, maybe even in the whole Sydney region, so if anyone could do it, it would be him.
He finished with a long flourish before raising the bow and bowing. We all clapped and cheered and he laughed. The boys knelt down and reached for the cello to see how badly damaged it was. I turned to look at it as well, hoping the water hadn't warped the wood too badly, when suddenly I was grabbed under the arms and tossed into the water. As I resurfaced everyone was laughing again. I turned to Joseph who was swimming toward me, “Was I good?” He grinned.
“Of course, you're the best.”
“Don't I know it.” He grabbed my shoulders and shoved me back under the water. I came back up gasping for air as I heard him laughing. “Oh Ash, you're too easy.”
“You're such a bully.” I grumbled.
He grabbed me and hugged me, “BBF's right?”
“We better be, because as your twin you're stuck with me.”
He grabbed my ponytail and squeezed the water out of it, “Good, now give me my twenty.”

Friday, April 13, 2012

Personal Note and Background Info For Kiya

Kiya is based on a real historical figure. Kiya was one of the wives of Amenhotep IV aka Akhenaten. She is a mystery to historians because - like most of the historical evidence from this period - her name was erased by her predecessors. Although she is believed (but not known for sure) to have been a princess from Mitanni who married Amenhotep III at the end of his reign then was passed on to Akhenaten, I have changed that to fit the fictional character which I have created. She appears almost out of no where during the Amarna period, then just as suddenly vanished from record. Some historians say she was disgraced and sent away, others say she died, where as others say Nefertiti grew jealous and had her banished. The thing is, no one is really sure about anything to do with Kiya, she is one of history's great mysteries.
Akhenaten was considered a heretic king because he denounced all other gods except the sun disc god Aten and proclaimed him the only true god. Through this, Akhenaten was able to gain power over the priests of Amun who had been growing in influence and power, and proclaimed himself the mouthpiece of Aten on earth because he was his mortal son and claimed to receive visions and revelations. The city of Akhetaten (which is called Tel El Amarna in modern times and I use the name Amarna in the story to remove any confusion between Akhenaten and the city's name during the period, Akhetaten) was one of the visions he received while traveling up the Nile, but historians believe he chose it because the land had never been touched before and was not dedicated to any god, and it was located in the east of his Kingdom. It isn't clear whether he was a genius or mad, so I give him a bit of both in the story. He also appeared to be disfigured in all the depictions of him which has mixed theories also. Some say it was stylised art of the period, but many believe (which is the theory I'm going with for the story) he suffered from the disorder known as Marfan's Syndrome, which would explain his long thin fingers, toes and face and his wide curved hips. People with this disease also live a shortened life span and have heart and lung problems which is the 'poor health' Kiya and others will speak of.
Hormheb was also a real figure during this period. He was a great military leader, but since military actions during the time of Akhenaten were limited, and he was given the position of Great Commander of the Army, he would not have found much to do in the way of campaigning, so I put him in the city as a political adviser. His family background is unknown, so I made up what he says about his origins. Whether he knew Kiya or not has never been mentioned, so it was simply a fictional friendship.
Nefertiti was Akhenaten's Great wife and the queen of Egypt, she had great power and influence over many things. She was supposed to have been very beautiful, and possibly the daughter of Ay, who was pharaoh after Tut's untimely death. She bore six daughters that they know for sure, and the three oldest became wives of Akhenaten also.
Egyptian Royalty regularly married their own sisters, daughters etc to keep the bloodline 'pure', while also marrying princesses and noble born women for treaty purposes. Concubines were women of lower status and the union usually did not involve land rights or dowries. These wives and concubines were usually passed down from one Pharaoh to the next at the passing of the previous Pharaoh. In all cultures of the period women were married young, probably due to their shorter life spans, (most common Egyptians didn't live beyond their forties) so girls marrying at 12 and 13 was normal as once they hit puberty they were considered women.
For context, the period in Hebrew history is the little known time frame between Joseph and Moses when they resided in the Egyptian provinces.
So there's some history for you about this story. I hope I capture the culture of the period well while dialing down on the perversions as much as I can. Its not as 'happy' as my other stories, it can actually be a little dark as people manipulate and hurt each other to gain power, but I believe in happy endings, sooo of course everything will turn out in the end :-D
This one is for my most faithful and oldest 'fan' Tamasin who has been reading my stories since I first wrote 'The Phantom' at age 12. You keep me going Tam!


Here are my sources for this story fyi:

    Thursday, April 12, 2012

    An Exchange finished!

    This story really means a lot to me. It was so personal and each character had their own little tales to tell to enrich and strengthen one another. I really want to know what YOU think of this one, so please leave a comment and tell me what you thought of it, what you did/didn't like, character development etc.
    I'll be taking a break for a while from typing these stories. This one has been very intense and time consuming for me and I need a break for a bit. Although, as I am typing this I am 2 months ahead on the scheduled releases so I may have another story on the way soon. We'll have to wait any see. But in the mean time there are quite a few stories here on my blog for you to read and hopefully enjoy and leave comments for me on each.
    Thank you for reading my stories, they mean a great deal to me and I hope in some way they touch you like they always do me.

    P.S - I am currently working on my story 'Kiya' based on the wife of Akhenaten who very little is known about. Due to the research involved to be historically accurate, it is proving to be time consuming. I will begin to post it when I feel I am far enough into it to be able to post it on here daily.

    P.P.S Kiya will begin posting tomorrow :-D