Title: Forbidden
Age and Genre: Adult, Suspense / Romance
Word Count: 100,000
Query:
Screams of terror and gunfire echo within the walls of a compound. The horrific massacre of fifteen Americans forces two government officials of The Republic of Islamic Provinces and Territories to plot a cover-up. The secret is thrust into the hands of a ruthless police captain, Hashim Sharif. Frustrated with his corrupt superiors, he covertly searches for forensic evidence. If his loyalty is questioned, an unmarked grave awaits him in the desert.
The gates of hell crash down on Sharif when he is ordered to execute the one witness – Eliza MacKay. It’s unthinkable to become the same gutter vermin he hunts in Samarra’s dark streets. Placing MacKay out of sight inside his apartment, he risks the wrath of Allah.
Hit men, the CIA, and his government have Sharif and MacKay in their cross hairs. Justice may never be served. Even so, he cannot commit an act most forbidden – treason. His family’s honor would be forever lost. With his Muslim morals and his life on the line, Sharif becomes the beast his enemies dread.
In spite of her struggle with PTSD, Sharif admires Mackay’s tenacity. He’s tortured by his deepening passion. If escape is possible, love will only get in the way. Or will it save them?
First 250 words:
*The Republic of Islamic Provinces & Territories, Year 2047 (introduced in prologue)
Eliza’s intuition begged her to leave RIPT*. She stepped up to the window overlooking the airport’s tarmac. The tower’s search beacon sliced through the ebony sky like a knife’s sharp blade. She shuddered. Her cold hands fidgeted with her head scarf. Jet engines roared as Air Arabia 267 reached takeoff speed. In seconds, the 747 disappeared into Samarra’s night sky like a homesick angel.
Her PTSD erupted with a child’s shriek. A ragging inferno and twisted metal flashed before her. Get out, hurry. Wide eyed and gasping for air, she darted through the crowd.
“Stop,” shouted a security guard. He grabbed her arm and yanked her aside. His painful grip instantly cleared her mind. A second guard pushed her forward. “Move,” he commanded in Arabic.
The officers shoved her into an office where a heavy-set man sat behind a desk. His tan colored military uniform barely fit his broad shoulders. A sign on his desk read ‘Sergeant Muntazar’. He merely glanced in her direction while thrusting his sidearm into his shoulder holster.
Oh God. She swallowed the last of her saliva. Who the hell knows I’m in Samarra? Eliza struggled to take a deep breath. What if he – Stop it. You’re a MacKay. She wrestled her panic into submission.
“Sergeant, why have I been treated like a criminal?” Her Arabic was passable.
“You’ve been here five hours, miss. Nervous. Explain, please.” His voice sounded casual, almost sultry. But his shoulders said, ‘Don’t fuck with me.’

I hope you enjoyed Forbidden's submission. My manuscript has undergone the scrutiny of many people including two police detectives, a manuscript 'doctor', a gun expert, two editors, and one Canadian Muslim pediatrician. Over the past two years I've posted snippets of Forbidden on my blog and received both enthusiastic accolades and helpful critiques. If you have any requests or comments, please let me know.
ReplyDeleteMy colleague and I both enjoyed it! Please send us a full synopsis and the first three chapters to submit@jollyfishpress.com. Address it to Reece Hanzon and Kelsy Thompson so we don't miss it. Thank you!
ReplyDeleteHi Reece: Thank you for taking the time to review Forbidden's entry. I shall send the requested documents today.
ReplyDeleteFirst Three Chapters: You can read the first three chapters (including the prologue) at: https://featherstoneauthor.wordpress.com/feathers-books/forbidden-wip/
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ReplyDeleteReaders who would love Forbidden enjoy unusual settings. They seek characters who are strong - strong enough to occasionally admit to their short comings. The hero/heroine is engaged with their internal demons as much as their antagonists. Forbidden readers will be challenged to sort through the forensic evidence along with Captain Sharif. They will applaud Eliza MacKay's tenacity and may even be able to relate to her struggles with PTSD. For those with a curiosity about Islam, Forbidden provides a neutral, middle-of-the-road view of a Muslim's world, without saturating the reader with details and religious jargon. Forbidden is a classic story of a hero who needs to determine where his loyalties lie and what he's willing to sacrifice for the sake of honor.
ReplyDeleteForbidden's prologue and first three chapters are available to read at my blog (Romance Under Fire): https://featherstoneauthor.wordpress.com/feathers-books/forbidden-wip/
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